首先写出给她的整体评价，然后写出他的不足和精彩部分。

有几句评语如下:

1、目标和结果不清晰。

it is noted that your manuscript needs careful editing by someone with expertise in technical english editing paying particular attention to english grammar, spelling, and sentence structure so that the goals and results of the study are clear to the reader.

2、未解释研究方法或解释不充分。

in general, there is a lack of explanation of replicates and statistical methods used in the study.

furthermore, an explanation of why the authors did these various experiments should be provided.

4、夸张地陈述结论/夸大成果/不严谨：

the conclusions are overstated. for example, the study did not show.

if the side effects from initial copper burst can be avoid with the polymer formulation.