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Dear Sir/Madam,

Thank you for your precious time spent in reading this email. I am a Chinese self-study examination student majored in Business Administration. I am an Undergraduate student and I want to (这儿怎么断了?) With a plan for further education and study in this field，and great respect for your university，would you please help me to clarify the following questions?

1、 Does your university accept self-study examination student?

2、 If you can, what are the conditions and what should I prepare for?

Thank you very much for your time and patience again.

Sincerely,

Albee Jiang