错句1. 语法错误，不能用 in thousands of people。应该是：

During every summer, thousands of people from around the world come here to walk, swim, and shop.

错句2. 语句不通，听起来很怪。应该是：

I like listening to music, reading books, and studying foreign cultures. I am good at sports and making friends with people. I can also speak English.

错句3. 句子不完整，应该是：

It's not far from the university of Birmingham.

错句4. 。。。嗯，写太复杂了。应该是：

The new energy has been developed and it's used to replace petroleum energy.

错句5. 句子不通，应该是：

As more and more convenient and efficiency transportion appear, human traveling in space is not a dream anymore.

我稍微改了一下原句（不然不好改英文）：更方便更快捷的交通工具出现，人类去太空旅行已经不是梦了。

错句6. 句子不通，应该是：

Robots are commom in people homes.

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